Merve ADA26 Ocak 2016 09:37
PEER EVALUATION FOR ESRA'S REFLECTION TASK 2B
I want to write about an advertisement on tv which is called as "Ülker Mutluluk Reklamı" because it is really entertaining and the happiness is shown in the advertisement successfully.In this advertisement , many children, men, and women have different ways of being happy.While some of them become happy by eating chocolate , the others are happy when they have a dinner with their beloved ones.In addition to the examples ı have given , there are also many ways to be happy in the advertisement such as travelling by boat , going shopping, looking at his/her lover , and caring about his/her baby.I think that the producer of this advertisement tries to make people buy and eat the products of the brand of "Ülker".He does it by emphasizing the happiness affect of the product and by giving examples for the ways of happiness.He also wants to tell that people shouldn't seek for happiness in so significant things and they can be happy with small things and by doing something for which they get a craving.I am of the opinion that as long as we want to enjoy our lives and be happy ,we can always find a way for it.This advertisement is important for society since it can be make people think about their lives and start to seek for ways of being happy and living a good life.Shortly, this advertisement can be guide for people in living more happily.
PEER EVALUATİON
Hi esra,
I liked your reflection topic very much. Happiness is a human want. In other words, every person wants to have happy happy life.I think people can find a way of being happy if they really want to be happy, as you said. I liked your ideas about this topic. Also, your paragraph is correct in terms of grammar and spelling. However, if you make your conclusion sentence a bit longer, your paragraph might look much better. Your writing is pretty good all in all.
I liked your reflection topic very much. Happiness is a human want. In other words, every person wants to have happy happy life.I think people can find a way of being happy if they really want to be happy, as you said. I liked your ideas about this topic. Also, your paragraph is correct in terms of grammar and spelling. However, if you make your conclusion sentence a bit longer, your paragraph might look much better. Your writing is pretty good all in all.
